pokemon: legend of the kyrouge part 1

Hello everybody my name is Sam i will be showing you the story I've been writing up at the moment it's about 12-13 part's long tell me what you think i will be updating every Tuesday possible tell me what you think

introduction

Once upon a time in an open field was the poke army but one specific pokemon called Jonathan who was a pikachu was celebrating his promotion as a general holding but a single badge of success
into the air. With the other pokemon going crazy, Jon was as proud as can be BUT, then he saw his girl friend Christie, deciding quick of which he wants more... the promotion... or the love of his life, he
decides that the only way to enjoy life was to share the enjoyment and gave his m.general Serena the badge and ran to get his girl. Out-raged, Serena had to think quick to keep someone as powerful as Jon into the army
and called his name several times. Ignoring her, Christie asked "why me", and he replied with a simple but effective "because we are one" and they disappear into the woods while Serena still shout his name trying to get him back.

PART 1: Meet Sam

Now lets move to my story. This story begins away from kanto and towards johto were a little pichu named Sam awakes from his sleep... Now I am no normal pichu, I have a power yet to be discovered. Now like all other new born pichus, I could only say pichu until I learnt to communicate

???: Sam come on, I got you an apple!
Sam: Pi... zzzzzz
???: Come on, get up!
???: Hey mum?
???: Yes Kevin?
Kevin: Can me and Ben go to the outer woods? :D
???: What did I say about the outer woods.
Kevin and Ben: That its too dangerous without an adult
???: Good now sa...?
???: Sam?
(As they all look up and see Sam who has just been born 5 hours ago to see Sam in the tree eating an apple)
???: Umm Kevin go get you're father...
Kevin: But why do...
???: NOW KEVIN!
(As Kevin runs of to get hes dad and returns in a flash)
???: Christie what's the matter?!
Christie: Jon, Sam's in the tree! (In a panicking voice)
Jonathan: HOW THE?! I CAN'T EVEN CLIMB THAT HIGH!
(Christie with a screw face on)
Jonathan: Ill go get him...
Kevin: Can I...
Jonathan: Dont even think about it..
(They look back up to see no sign of Sam in the tree... then looks around frantically, back on the side of tree to see Sam sitting down with a big smile on his face and the rest of them with a shocked face)
Jonathan: Umm.. HOW DID HE GET THERE??
Christie: I have no idea??
Cathy: I'm back... huh? what's with all the shocked faces?
Jonathan: You wouldn't believe us if we told ya!

END OF PART 1

tell me what ya think this is my first ever story and i got all this from dreaming XD :)